THE DIARY OF AN EROTIC WRITER

Sneak peek revisited

A second pass through the scene I posted yesterday prompted quite a few changes. Now it feels like a good enough first draft to go on with. Here's a part of the revision:


We dress—if you can call it that—and follow the guy through a maze of hallways and down a flight of stairs. No brass and glass spiral this time, only a dim unpainted service staircase.  I'm wearing the shortest possible short shorts, purple with yellow trim, a matching cap with a yellow W on the front, my black feather choker, and my face paint. Nothing else.

          Holly and Skyla are better than me at managing the steps in super-high heels. I hold the handrail to keep from teetering. Though I try to hurry, I can't keep up.

          When I finish struggling down the stairs, I'm in front of open double doors. The guy who escorted us here serves me a grimace of impatience. I sashay past him with my nose high, hoping my body language puts him is his dickwad place.

          A pinch on the seat of my shorts makes me flinch, which is all it takes too lose my balance. I stumble into a tall bar chair. The back of the chair falls against the shoulder of a man at the next table. He's too busy running his hands all over Skyla to give me more than any annoyed glance.

          Mr. Dickwad gives me a wink as he walks away to tend bar. I regain my balance and look around. Old rock music and sports announcer nonsense blare out of huge speakers. In the light cast by a room full of giant screens, naked women come on heavily to men who seem nearly as interested in the televised football game. Beer bottles are everywhere. So is sex. Evidently there aren't any private rooms connected to the sports bar. Fondling, kissing, sucking, and fucking are happening at the bar, around and on top of the tall tables, in the booths, and on the couches.  

 

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